You read the music very well, and intonation is good, too.
In order to make things better, let’s think of four things:
- Trills has to be better controlled. The number of your trills are slightly different based on how comfortable your hand is at the moment. However, trills should be the same number consistently, especially in this context. Why not trying with lower number of trills first, in order to get the feel of controlling them? After that, you can increase the number of trills.
*** excuse me for not being able to write the first beats as pick ups as Kayser wrote ^^; ***
***Rec. contains: example 1, example 2 and more number of trills. Although my left hand motion is limited due to my left wrist tendinitis (wearing a supporter), I’m pretty sure readers can pick up my intention. 🙂 ***
2. Music says Andante, which is walking tempo, so you do not need to play too fast. Every person has his own idea of walking tempo. I rather you to learn good technique as well as start using your good 🙂 brain while you are playing. so, it is OK to play on the little slow side, but try to produce good sound with character.
3. A quater note with staccato should not be too short. It is still a quater note. It should not sound like eighth note with staccato, or 16th note with staccato. You can use more bow by moving the bow fast in order to add staccato character.
4. Also, m.4 and so on, the rhythm of the combination of dotted eighth note and 16th note should be very precise. The ratio of the length of those notes is…? ” 3 to 1 ! “ That is right ! We talk about it often, so you know it well. 🙂